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Freelance writer and marketing monkey

This weekend, I witnessed a pitch gone wrong. I was at a local fair with my family, and a scout leader was selling raffle tickets. He kept shouting the same line over and over: “Raffle tickets, 25 kroner, support the scouts, win travel gift cards!” It wasn’t a bad offer. But nobody cared. Why? Because he was talking at people, not to people. That's why he was the only vendor with no customers. Here’s what I would've done differently: 1. Picked a victim from the crowd. 2. Asked them if they needed a holiday. 3. Then slowly segueing into pitching my raffle tickets. I would've mentioned how expensive holidays can be, but that I had these sweet gift cards on offer and that they'd support the local scouts at the same time. So here's how you can apply that to your copy: 1. Focus on one person at a time. 2. Lead with the benefit that’ll grab their attention. 3. Speak like you’re having a conversation, not giving a lecture. That's it for today -- happy Monday, ya'll.

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Luke Netherclift

Cofounder @ Let’s Level Up | Helping coaches and experts to build and scale their business

3mo

Talking to someone makes the message so much more personal and effective.

Jessica Young

Growing green businesses with social media storytelling | Mum to 3 sprouts

3mo

Love the idea of just focusing on one person at a time to begin with. Then just iterate! Great advice :)

Matt McGinty

Experienced Leader with a Focus on Emotional Intelligence | Supporting Positive Workplace Dynamics and Employee Engagement through Proven, Evidence-Based Approaches

3mo

Great example of how personal engagement can make a difference! Tailoring your pitch to address individual needs really changes the game.

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